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Amrit Manghera
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ke lena-- Amrit manghera
Jad sade sohne he ne karde pasand sanu,
Ta asi loka de pasand ban k ke lena,

Jad sade sohne he ne kehnde sohne sanu,
Ta asi lokan to sohne akhwa k ke lena,

Jad ohna nu he ne pasand pag sade,
Ta asi pag de pech bana ke ki lena,

Jad sade nalo ohna nu ne gair pasand,
Ta ohna to dhake nal apna akhwa ke ki lena,

Jad oh karde ne galan sanu chadan diyan,
Ta dhake nal ohna nu apna bana ke ki lena,

'Manghera' ta pujda reha rab de tha ohnu
Jad ohnu he rab banana na aya,
Ta asi pathra de puja kar ke lena,
13 Sep 2009

Satwinder  Satti
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kaim aa 22 G bahut wadhiya.
13 Sep 2009

Amrit Manghera
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thanks bai g.,.
13 Sep 2009

Amrinder Singh
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nice attempt 22 g..
but there is scope of improvement...
rhythm tuttda hai...

Changa parhde raho.. changa likhde raho :)
keep it up

18 Sep 2009

Amrit Manghera
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i know bai ji par eh ta wese he bethe bethe ban gaya...
21 Sep 2009

jasbir singh
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Amrit manghera ji bahut khoob...
21 Sep 2009

G.S.GILL ...!!
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22 matter te mehnat di lor aa but ehsaas dumdaar ne
koi na chakki chalo phatte
22 Sep 2009

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